【古意诗风】却话巴山夜雨时

岚枫

轻舟踏浪 发表于 2016-11-22 10:47
心雨如歌，把两处相思的情肠说尽，巴山夜雨见证了多少真挚的四季绵长。诗歌中将突出的几个温馨画面，连缀成 ...

感谢这次古意诗风的练笔，让相伴的时光更加美好，有意义，为提前完成作业，猴哥干杯

岚枫

慕林 发表于 2016-11-22 22:43
巴山夜雨和思念一同滴下，淋淋沥沥地在心里，在思乡的梦中，如同晶莹的泪滴在情海，三千青丝只为君绾起，等 ...

林林，你的回复总是暖心如缕~~~现在我就等着飞回长安见佳人啦{:1_623:}

岚枫

风清云静 发表于 2016-11-23 08:38
恭喜枫儿完成作业，五首，首首都精彩

也恭喜大家，与静静姐一起等着回家见佳人喽{:1_646:}

岚枫

晴儿 发表于 2016-11-23 10:45
梦回长安，长安有梦，长安更有日夜所想的人儿，一纸婉约一夜梦长，岁月的风铃摇响盼望的声音

我们手牵手一起回家吧{:1_645:}

岚枫

晴儿 发表于 2016-11-23 10:46
温婉的美人儿，你将巴山的夜雨都说的心动了

那你心动了没有{:1_627:}

                               
登录/注册后可看大图

A Lane in the Rain  

By Dai Wangshu

Alone holding an oil-paper umbrella,

I wander along a long

Solitary lane in the rain,

Hoping to encounter

A girl like a bouquet of lilacs

Gnawed by anxiety and resentment.

A girl ,The colour of lilacs

The fragrance of lilacs,

With the worries of lilacs,

Feeling melancholy in the rain,

Plaintive and hesitating.

She wanders along the solitary lane in the rain,

Holding an oil-paper umbrella

Just as I do,

Just like me,

Walking slowly in silence,

Aloof, sad and melancholy.

Silently she comes closer,

Closer, giving me

A glance like a sigh;  

Then she floats past

Like a dream,

Dreary and blank like a dream.

Like a lilac

Floating past like a dream,

the girl floats past me;

Silently she goes further and further,

To the crumbling wall,

Out of the lane in the rain.

In the mournful melody of the rain,

Her colour has faded,

Her fragrance has disappeared,

Vanished into the void;

Even her glance like a sigh,

Melancholy like lilacs.

Alone, holding an oil-paper umbrella,

I wander along a long

Solitary lane in the rain,

Hoping to pass

A girl like a bouquet of lilacs

Gnawed by anxiety and resentment.

岚枫

轻舟踏浪 发表于 2016-11-23 12:59 洋洋洒洒的情怀，依依表现的可圈可点，发押自如语言也讲究，感情的处理上温柔与浪漫都存在

我都要词穷了，憋得脸都红了{:1_627:}你必须多给我几个优，悄悄滴说~~~~

岚枫

轻舟踏浪 发表于 2016-11-23 12:59 鱼苗，你的诗心一洒也是一大把

嗯呐，这个我也信~~~

白云千载

岚枫 发表于 2016-11-23 19:39
我自己也喜欢这节，谢谢云儿用心赏读，我回复来迟

哈哈，我可不可以说英雄所见略同？？

白云千载

岚枫 发表于 2016-11-23 19:40
嗯嗯，爱就是要执念着，守望着，彼此温暖着

恩，刚刚听完铃铃的就这样一直相伴！

静水蓝蝶

岚枫 发表于 2016-11-23 19:42
蝶儿，辛苦~~~一起写诗开心，这样相伴的时光更有意义

恩，你们喜欢，我们就继续在以后的光阴里抒情相守{:1_645:}